February 09th, 2016

2/9/2016

Charlie`s Mom is Jess. I don`t know why Jess let Charlie get away with breaking one of Jordan`s (Charlies sister) good pics. when Jess was yelling at Charlie I think it was ok with what he did because all Jess heard was Jordan crying and telling her. And if I were Jess I would not make Jordan say sorry.

3 Comments

Riley

2/9/2016 11:00:31 am

I think it is a very nice paragraph, I would try making it a little longer though and a little more descriptive! nice job!

Austin

2/9/2016 11:00:32 am

It made sense but it needs to be longer

Eunice

2/9/2016 11:29:49 am

It's great, but it needs more detail and needs to be a bit longer!

February 09th, 2016

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